|
|
Post by jonniebuk on Apr 21, 2010 20:11:07 GMT -5
I'm with nomdeplume8ie[/b]. Great story, well written in every respect. 10 out 10!  |
|
|
|
Post by mushroomeaterme on Apr 21, 2010 20:58:53 GMT -5
good story sooky. i to also like the realistc (sp) story line. i like simple. thank you
|
|
carld2
Full Member
Posts: 2,137
|
Post by carld2 on Apr 21, 2010 22:42:15 GMT -5
I loved that. Your English puts most fanfic writers to shame. And I love the image of Jackson and Aaron walking together under an umbrella. It reminds me of the "I'm Just a Fella With an Umbrella" number in Easter Parade. I'm sure Aaron would NOT approve.
|
|
mycatfox
Full Member
"One sees clearly only with the heart. What is essential is invisible to the eye"
Posts: 2,042
|
Post by mycatfox on Apr 21, 2010 22:58:54 GMT -5
 I loved your story, sooky! Simple, warm, str8forward. And it offers a realistic (and beautiful) solution to the Jackson/Aaron's rift. Thank you a lot for sharing, you really made my day, sister  |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 11:35:47 GMT -5
Fantastic story sookyLove the way it is written, would love to read more  |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 11:36:40 GMT -5
One word WOW.  I find it very hard to believe that English isn't your mother tongue after reading that. Hell, I have more grammar mistakes than you I'd say. And not only was the grammar and syntax good, it was also well written. Keep it up. And I really like fanfics, like yours, that include details that have actually happened in the show. It makes it that bit more real, I think. ;D I couldn't agree with you more ;D |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 12:01:38 GMT -5
Not exactly a fanfic, but a poem that I saw on the DS forum It's meant to be a poem from Jackson to Aaron called: ODE TO A GAY MECHANICOh Aaron, how you move my soul,
One sight of your overalls swells my heart
And my pant area
Oh Aaron, you are like the mighty oak,
Standing strong and proud,
And I am like the playful squirrel,
Climbing your trunk
For a nibble of your acorns. ;D |
|
nomdeplume8ie
Full Member
"Well, if I can't boink you, I'm just going to have to boink the rest of your family,no exceptions."
Posts: 1,029
|
Post by nomdeplume8ie on Apr 22, 2010 12:28:28 GMT -5
;D I saw that too. Are you on the DS forums as well, but under a different name?  |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 12:36:40 GMT -5
;D I saw that too. Are you on the DS forums as well, but under a different name? Yeah, I didn't actually realise that I had an account, apparently I have had it since 2007  and my name is Danny Man, don't have a clue where that name came from  ;D |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 12:39:02 GMT -5
Another rather smutty-ish poem from DS. In the sky, the sun shines so bright,
as Aaron walks into sight.
Boy plus boy, Hand in hand,
a love Aaron could not understand.
Making love on the sandy beach,
that climax they want to reach.
Boy plus boy, they both cream,
this is Aaron's sunset dream. |
|
nomdeplume8ie
Full Member
"Well, if I can't boink you, I'm just going to have to boink the rest of your family,no exceptions."
Posts: 1,029
|
Post by nomdeplume8ie on Apr 22, 2010 12:51:22 GMT -5
;D I saw that too. Are you on the DS forums as well, but under a different name? Yeah, I didn't actually realise that I had an account, apparently I have had it since 2007 and my name is Danny Man, don't have a clue where that name came from ;D Perhaps this is fate... |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 12:55:16 GMT -5
Yeah, I didn't actually realise that I had an account, apparently I have had it since 2007 and my name is Danny Man, don't have a clue where that name came from ;D Perhaps this is fate... Perhaps ;D Do you have the same name on DS? |
|
nomdeplume8ie
Full Member
"Well, if I can't boink you, I'm just going to have to boink the rest of your family,no exceptions."
Posts: 1,029
|
Post by nomdeplume8ie on Apr 22, 2010 12:58:35 GMT -5
Yeah, same name, I created it just a few days ago, and BOY, GetSmart is quite the smut lover. |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 13:10:13 GMT -5
Yeah, same name, I created it just a few days ago, and BOY, GetSmart is quite the smut lover. Oh I know, I've read the comments ;D |
|
sooky
Junior Member
Waterbee ♥ Wasserbienchen
Posts: 249
|
Post by sooky on Apr 22, 2010 13:37:57 GMT -5
Didn't think there'd be so much positive resonance! Thanks so much to everyone who read, I'm really, really happy now! |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 13:40:50 GMT -5
Didn't think there'd be so much positive resonance! Thanks so much to everyone who read, I'm really, really happy now! Good You should be, it's a really good fic ;D |
|
nomdeplume8ie
Full Member
"Well, if I can't boink you, I'm just going to have to boink the rest of your family,no exceptions."
Posts: 1,029
|
Post by nomdeplume8ie on Apr 22, 2010 13:41:50 GMT -5
Didn't think there'd be so much positive resonance! Thanks so much to everyone who read, I'm really, really happy now! And we'll be even happier if you keep doing what you do best - writing amazing fanfic! ;D |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 13:45:04 GMT -5
Didn't think there'd be so much positive resonance! Thanks so much to everyone who read, I'm really, really happy now! And we'll be even happier if you keep doing what you do best - writing amazing fanfic! ;D Exactly ;D |
|
sooky
Junior Member
Waterbee ♥ Wasserbienchen
Posts: 249
|
Post by sooky on Apr 22, 2010 14:47:34 GMT -5
And we'll be even happier if you keep doing what you do best - writing amazing fanfic! ;D How do I say now that this is my first fanfiction ever? I mean, I've written originals (mostly German, though, and only a few English ones now and then) but I was dead frightened to get OOC. Oh, well, I guess you boosted my confidence now - just keep hoping you won't regret it later on - and if I find any more inspiration, I'll try writing more. (Who needs Latin anyway, when they HAZ AARSON FIC?!?) |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 15:17:50 GMT -5
And we'll be even happier if you keep doing what you do best - writing amazing fanfic! ;D How do I say now that this is my first fanfiction ever? I mean, I've written originals (mostly German, though, and only a few English ones now and then) but I was dead frightened to get OOC. Oh, well, I guess you boosted my confidence now - just keep hoping you won't regret it later on - and if I find any more inspiration, I'll try writing more. (Who needs Latin anyway, when they HAZ AARSON FIC?!?) Oh trust me, the WORLD needs you to write more |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 22, 2010 16:56:30 GMT -5
A great fic on Fanfiction.Net Link: www.fanfiction.net/s/5909287/1/Scream_Your_Heart_OutThe Fanfic: SCREAM YOUR HEART OUT!It was awkward.
Being sat on his bed, Jackson sat beside him skimming his eyes down the walls and flicking through the various pin up girls held up on the wall with cheap blu-tak. The soft hum of relaxed music did nothing to settle his nerves only made him fidget the more.
Jackson was patient, Aaron would give him that. There wasn't many people who would have stuck through all of the hesitation.
It felt right, Jesus it felt right. It was just hard.
Paddy had left them to it, never asked any questions, he didn't need to know nor did he particular want to know. He said he would stand by Aaron and he was, it was just that certain things were allowed to go un-said.
Jackson shifted beside him and Aaron felt his throat go dry. Why was it was un-comfortable?
"This is fun." Jackson stated with a light laugh he elbowed Aaron gently in the side.
Aaron smiled softly, breathing deeply he turned to face Jackson. His eyes a light shade of determined brown. He bit his lip and leaned forward. Jackson took the hint quickly closing his eyes and leaning towards Aaron.
The beating of Aaron's heart rocketed in his chest, beating miles in minutes. The back of his throat had turned dry, tingling nerve ends shot through his fingers and air resisted the pull of his lungs.
Jackson opened his eyes slowly, watching the panicked teenager through half lidded eyes. He swallowed the sigh in his throat and reach his hand out to lay comfortingly over Aaron's. He flinched but quickly cast his eyes down and cursed to Jackson's amusement.
"It's okay." Jackson whispered softly dropping his forehead against Aaron's when the teenager squeezed Jackson's hand tightly. Aaron hissed lightly squeezing his eyes together tightly out of frustration. Jackson smiled faintly brushing the tip of his nose gently against Aaron's. "Just take it slow."
Aaron shook his head, nipping the cracked skin of his lower lip. It shouldn't be this hard. It was just a kiss, he had kissed many times before granted it was a woman on the receiving end of that kiss.
Jackson rolled his eyes shut and tugged his hand from Aaron's. He ran the tips of his fingers gently against the teenagers arm until the palm of his hand came to rest over the back of Aaron's neck.
Aaron shivered and swallowed the lump in his throat when Jackson's hand slithered it's way across his flustered red cheek to grasp the point of his chin between a rough forefinger and thumb. Jackson pulled back opening his eyes just enough to watch hesitant eyes skip down to his lips then back.
A smirk danced it's way over Jackson's mouth, fluttering his eyes again to a soft close he leaned forward, Aaron fell back his action stopped by Jackson's hand sliding to his back quickly to hold him in place.
"Relax, Aaron."
Aaron licked his lips his eyes falling down to Jackson's lips just as they fell forward and captured his own in a gentle kiss. His heart rate sped up as his eyes fell to a soft close, Jackson's mouth was soft and comforting.
The hand rested against Aaron's back fell and Aaron wound his arms to Jackson's neck. Bringing them both down to the mattress of Aaron's bed. Jackson pulled back watching as Aaron smirked and pulled him back down their lips touching roughly.
A serge of confidence fluttered through Aaron as he ran his tongue along Jackson's lower lip, his heart soaring when he parted his lips and ran his tongue against the roof of Aaron's mouth. Jackson tasted just as sweet, the odd mixture of alcohol and mint flooded Aaron's taste buds leaving an odd craving on the end of his tongue.
"See." Jackson hummed, a grin slipping against his mouth again when Aaron brought his face down and captured Jackson's mouth between his own. "Wasn't so hard was it?"
"Shut up." Aaron snapped playfully rolling to straddle Jackson's hips, his mouth dominantly claiming those of his lovers, rough mescaline fingers fell to thread through the short strands of Jackson's hair. Jackson moaned softly tugging Aaron's tongue into his mouth and sucking lightly to provoke a low moan in the back of his younger lovers throat.
His hands falling against Aaron's hips to skim the print of his fingers against the rim of Aaron's jeans, skimming the tips under the rolled up shirt to send quick shivers across the younger's back. |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 23, 2010 9:29:53 GMT -5
|
|
|
|
Post by tihkon2 on Apr 23, 2010 18:02:55 GMT -5
Hi folks,
In the future, if a story is located on another website, just post the link to it. Not the entire story. Thanks! By the way...someone asked earlier who other people thought were sexy men on Emmerdale, besides Aaron, Adam, and Jackson. I'd have to say Andy, and most definately Pa Barton. Adam's dad John is one handsome man.
|
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 23, 2010 18:06:44 GMT -5
Hi folks,
In the future, if a story is located on another website, just post the link to it. Not the entire story. Thanks! By the way...someone asked earlier who other people thought were sexy men on Emmerdale, besides Aaron, Adam, and Jackson. I'd have to say Andy, and most definately Pa Barton. Adam's dad John is one handsome man. BIB - okay will do Oh how could we forget Pa Barton, he is one sexy DILF ;D  |
|
|
|
Post by dannybaby1234 on Apr 23, 2010 18:55:42 GMT -5
|
|
;D
